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2006-11-02 [Talkris]: In the history, the Locusts have no set "hideout". Anyone who has had a run in with the law or is a known terrorist knows not to do that, its just silly and predictible, haha. people don't come to them, they seek members out.
2006-11-02 [Fizban]: Secondly...you have more on your page about feathers and swimming then you do about her actual technological expertise. You don't say what technologies she has on her, how she learned it at all, how she got so good, her background is a joke. She sounds like she is more magical then she is anything else...*out of no where she leaves and then returns months later with the magical power to do everything with technology, tada!!* As though normal people can do that at all...except that they can't, and it doesn't work like that in the least.
She has no creditials, no proof of ability, no reliability, no practicality. She sounds more like a gypsy then a technician.
You didn't mention anything about what she may or may not specialize in, you didn't mention if she has anything at all!!, She is a technician, and you talk about her throw? She makes guns and doesn't use them? What? She can make laserbeam or a bomb, but doesn't utilize them? Or any technologies? Which is what a rational person would do, or state anything about some aversion to using said things for violence personally, so she doesn't fight.
2006-11-02 [Estantia]: I need to explain things in more detail then, and this is why I sent it to you fizban for checking through first... I will write all of the corrections, it just didn't occur to me I'd need all of those things in there as I knew them so well >.<
2006-11-02 [Talkris]: Write them in as soon as possible, please.
2006-11-02 [Estantia]: it's unlikely to be any time today I'm afraid...
2006-11-09 [Talkris]: Are you going to tweak this sheet? Basically all I'm doing now is waiting for this to be finished before we can start. And the others are getting impatient and pestering me almost constantly as to when we're going to start. Its up to you to finish this.
2006-11-09 [Estantia]: oh gods sorry, i didn't realise you were all waiting on me... tell me next time...
2006-11-09 [Talkris]: heh, sorry.
2006-11-09 [Estantia]: better?
2006-11-09 [Fizban]: much better, you explained her technological portion.
However, has it been explained how you came into contact/know the locusts?
How about how something about you were suppling them intravenously for a while, them just going to you for parts...
then again that would require that you either own or work at a parts store, that sells techno parts premade and otherwise.
Just trying to think of a believable way for your char to have become involved with the locusts.
2006-11-10 [Talkris]: She could work at a junk shop. Things woul dbe supplied to her and she can bring them to the locusts. That could also be how she got involved.
2006-11-10 [Estantia]: I was thinking of her reputation, if she's one of the best around and you need a technology expert then you're going to look for one, and the fact she's managed to keep herself a secret that does show she can keep things she's heard to herself.
2006-11-11 [Talkris]: I just realized, she needs a last name. She's human, afterall.
2006-11-12 [Estantia]: oops, i had it in the first one i sent, but not the second... May
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