Sry everyone here is the checked version of chapter one. Stupid typos.
Into The Darkened Souls (Prologue)
Standing atop the hill, the suns rays hitting my body for the first time in months, my eyes fill with tears as I look at the devastation left by the horrid "Chaos War". It had been two long years; two years of destruction, devastation and remorse. The war between the ultimate army of darkness- The Legions of Chaos- and the rest of earth had ended today by the blood on my hand and the power of my spells.
Looking into the valley where the final battle took place I saw millions of casualties. Deaths for every race: Human, Elf, Dragon. The blood flowed like dark red rivers. Tears flowed even thicker than the Blood. My head hurt, my vision was blurring, the darkness was engulfing me and I was slipping into unconsciousnes
Chapter 1
The Beginning
Two years earlier.
I awoke that fateful morning to the sound of my beautiful wife playing her violin. It was a beautiful melody from our childhood called "Savior".I rose from my bed and walked out onto the balcony that looked over our garden. I spied her sitting on the fountain: Her deep green eyes, so peaceful and full, her beautiful auburn hair hanging at shoulder length. Her sensitive pointed ears poked though so you could just see the tips. Her wonderful smile that melted the hearts of many and the most beautiful Purple gown you had ever seen. She had grown the cotton herself and wove the entire thing. The violin was her grandfather's.
She saw me and called, "Carrick, dear come down and we'll have breakfast."
I nodded my reply and swiftly went back into the room to change into the outfit she had made for me. It was a pair of dark blue pants that was soft as silk but stronger than iron and light as air. A soft blue shirt of the same material and a darker blue flowing cloak. I stopped to look at myself in the mirror before departing. Standing at 5' 8' I was pretty tall for an elf. My hair was a natural silver and my eyes a deep brown. My ears were also very protruding, which was a common characteristic among us sea elves. My darling Lavitia was a forest elf.
Upon reaching the courtyard I found lavitia still perched on the fountain. The sight brings me back to the night I asked her to be my queen right here in front of this very fountain. The full moon and the stars were a perfect background as she smiled and accepted my proposal. Our wedding rings were very special indeed. Lavitia has a magical connection with earth and fire. Mixing the together she produced a magical golden plant that she shaped to be rings for us. It is always moving and growing so it is never the same ring twice. Today hers has a little flower growing on the top which encased a deep red ruby. Mine was similar with a dark sapphire.
When I got close I noticed there was breakfast on a silver tray next to a notice of some kind. Lavitia stopped playing and gave me a kiss and we sat down to eat. It was almost a feast, filled with pastries and nuts and berries. After eating our fill I reached over to the notice. I unwrapped the ribbon and slowly unrolled it as Lavitia rolled her eyes.
"What?"
"Nothing... It's just you always take those notices so seriously. I mean you haven't even opened it yet and you already have a solemn expression on your face."
"I don't always take them so seriously... but your right maybe it's just another: All's Well."
" Well aren't you going to read it?"
"Yes, I was just absorbing the moment. I love it when you worry that I worry too much."
My eyes moved across the page and I read the big, bold print. My eyes filled with tears and my jaw dropped. My heart skipped a beat and Lavitia noticing something was wrong, looked at me with hope in her eyes, hope that the news wasn't too bad.
"My parents... they were murdered."
Hello, every one. This is Carrick i dohjnt know if any one iss actually reading this but if you do sign my guest book. Last time i said i would start a story so this is the begining of chapter one. Or the prologue.
Into The Darkened Soul
(Prologue)
Standing atop the hill, the suns rays hitting my body for the first time in months, my eyes fill with tears as I look at the devastation left by the horrid "Chaos War". It had been two long years; two years of destruction, devastation and remorse. The war between the ultimate army of darkness- The Legions of Chaos- and the rest of earth had ended today by the blood on my hand and the power of my spells.
Looking into the valley where the final battle took place I saw millions of casualties. Deaths for every race: Human, Elf, Dragon. The blood flowed like dark red rivers. Tears flowed even thicker than the Blood. My head hurt, my vision was blurring, the darkness was engulfing me and I was slipping into unconsionsness
Chapter 1
The Begining
Two years earlier.
I awoke that fateful morning to the sound of my beatiful wife playing her violin. It was a beatiful melody from our childhood called "Savior".I rose from my bed and walked out onto the balcony that looked over our garden. I spied her sitting on the fountain: Her deep green eyes, so peacefull and full, her beautiful auburn hair hanging at shoulder length. Her sensitive pointed ears poked though so you could just see the tips. Her wonderful smile that melted the hearts of many and the most beautiful Purple gown you had ever seen. She had grown the cotton herself and weaved the entire thing. The violin was her grandfather's.
She saw me and called, "Carrick, dear come down and we'll have breakfast."
I nodded my reply and swiftly went back into ther room to change into the oputfit she had made for me. It was a pair of dark blue pants that was soft as silk but stroonger than iron and light as air. A soft blue shirt of the same material and a darker blue flowing cloak. I stopped to look at myself in the mirror before departing. Standing at 5' 8' I was pretty tall for an elf. My hair was a natural silver and my eyes a deep brown. My ears were also very protruding, which was a common characteristic among us sea elves. My darling Lavitia was a forest elf.
Apon reaching the courtyard I found lavitia still perched on the fountain. The sight brings me back to the night I asked her to be m,y queen right here in front of this very fountain. The full moon and the stars were a perfect backround as she smiled and accepted my proposal. Our wedding rings were very special indeed. Lavitia has a magical connetion with earth and fire. Mixing the together she produced a magical golden plant that she shaped to be rings for us. It is always moving and growing so it is never the same ring twice. Today hers has a liitle flower growing on the top which encased a deep red ruby. Mine was similar with a dark sapphire.
When I got close I noticed there was breakfast on a silveer tray next to a notice of some kind. Lavitia stopped playing and gave me a kiss and we sat down to eat. It was almost a feast, filled with pastries and nuts and berries. After eating our fill I reached over to the notice. I unwrapped the ribbon and slowly unrolled it as Lavitia rooled her eyes.
"What?"
"Nothing... It's just you always take those notices so seriously. I mean you haven't even opened it yet and you already have a solem expression on your face."
"I don't always take them so seriously... but your right maybe it's just another: All's Well."
" Well aren't you going to read it?"
"Yes, I was just absorbing the moment. I love it when you worry that I worry too much."
My eyes moved across the page and I read the big, bold print. My eyes filled with tears and my jaw dropped. My heart skipped a beat and Lavitia noticing something was wrong, looked at me with hope in her eyes, hope that the news wasn't too bad.
"My parents... they were murdered."
Today was good. It is my second day on Elftown and I will soon have pics. I wrote a poem and would like to share it but itll be o nthe mainpage. YESTERDAYWASAS
With Love Carrick.
Ill start a story on here too