Well, sorry for the false advertising on chapter 3. That stuff is in chapter 4, I forgot the huge flashback goin on in chapter 3 was too long to include the stuff I guarantee is in chapter four.
Also, I have about five or six active friends on et. I would like to have five or six watchers on the chapters. I know some of you could give a fuck about DragonBallZ, but this is the first completed novel, fanfiction or otherwise, that i have ever written. Even if you don't care for the subject matter, what I'm looking for, is your artistic input.
That's right, I'm not looking for praise, or little "Cool!" comments. I want criticism on the story. I want you to comment and lambast what doesn't work and laud what does. I want comments to appear under these chapters. I want DBZ fans to comment on what I change and fellow writers to remark on my writing style and the flow of the story!
Plus, I need a proofreader. Chapter three got revised at like 3:00 in the morning and it has ugly typoes I can't really mess with on my phone, so volunteers to proofread, um, I'll think of a little bonus to give.
For instance, I am currently writing the second novel of DragonBall Turbo, called Enter the Slave Master which is a fully original storyline. It has seven major villains in it, and I've been thinking of auditioning two of the villain spots to other DBZ fanfiction writers. What this means is if you give me a character concept profile, I may just write him/her into the story. Keep in mind there's a fair chance of that char becoming a reaccurring character if they're any good! The funny thing is, the titular character of Enter the Slave Master was just a loose concept sone idiot in rehab gave me when he saw me writing Cell Games Finale and I just took it, based the Slave Master around his personality, and started writing. It's been fun so far!
So, my friends, support and share DBT: Cell Games Finale, please!!!!??? It's very important to me!
Chapter 2 is finally fully posted on DBT: Cell Games Finale! Chapter threw is going up tonight! Expect a longer chapter with tons of action! Vegeta, Trunks, Piccolo, and Hercule are all in the thick of it tonight!!!
WARNING: the following diary contains many, many uses of the word "fuck" and a consistant, unshakable hatred of Apple products. Enjoy!
Fuuuuuuuck! FUCK YOU APPLE! Your operating systems are fucking BULLSHIT!
Do any of you know how fucking FUCK much it blows to use Elftown on an iPhone? It fucking SSsSSSSsssUCKS
obviously they designed this glitchtastic, industry sub-par piece of trash just to surf fucking YouTube and do nothing else!
Do not even think I'm being ungrateful. This thing beats my 6 year old LG flipphone by the circumference of the fucking earth but COME ON!
Oh, by the way I pressed 17 buttons to make the eight character phrase "COME ON!" appear on this fucker. When did we invent the fucking shift key? 1712?????
It is im-fucking-pos
That's fucking right. If I were at that point to start typing "It was the best of times, it was the worst of times..." one of two things would happen. Either I hit "submit changes" and none of that shit appears, or I get
"It was the bxhodigsgodcjZ
fuck YOU Apple. Did you think on your fucking touch screen you could make the fucking thing distinguish between an edit box and the entire web page? Was that fucking impossible? Or to make this thing with enough ram to fucking handle fucking typing?
At this point in my rant, I had a "worst of times" glitch event, where I was forced to select-copy my rant, refresh the page, hit paste, and re-proceed to restrain myself from wishing steve jobs was burning in hell right now. And thank you, auto-correct, but I meant hell, not he'll.
Also, it is, so far as I know, impossible to delete ANYTHING off this phone. Movies, songs, broken-hopeles
FUCK YOU, APPLE!
Now, if you'll excuse me, I'm going to return to my two-hour and counting quest to see if I can continue posting Chapter 2 of DragonBall Turbo.
... Fucking shitPhone.
Of the moment quiz list! Feel free to post in your diary so I can learn about you!
Game of the moment: SmackDown! Here Comes the Pain
Anime of the moment: DragonBall-Z
Show of the moment: Justified
Song of the moment: "Orion" by Metallica
Shoes of the moment: Nike Air Force 1
Weather of the moment: Rain
Book of the moment: A Clash of Kings by George R.R. Martin
YouTube video of the moment: "Halloween is Grinch Night"
Quote of the moment: "What! You need to talk to Mr. Deez!"
Activity of the moment: Pokemon Roleplay
Crush of the moment: Echo!!!
Inspiration of the moment: TheAmazingAthe
Bonus: lyric of the moment:
"...I'm standing on top of my Monopoly board
That means I'm on top of my game, and It won't stop
Till my hip don't hop anymore!
And you can't stand cuz it ain't cool to be cocky anymore!
And you spit when these fools can't dribble a drop anymore!"
For Echo!
From my heart and from my hand
Why don't people understand
My intentions?
Weird Science!
Plastic tubes & pots and pans
Bits and pieces and
Magic from the hand
We'll make it!
Weird Science!
Things I've never seen before
Behind bolted doors
Talent and imagination
Weird Science!
Not what teacher said to do
Living tissue,
warm flesh
Weird Science!
Plastic tubes & pots and pans
Bits & pieces and
Bits & pieces and
My Creation!
Is it real?
My Creation! It's my Creation!
Oooh, Weird Science!
Magic and technology
Voodoo dolls and chants
Electricity
We'll make it!
Weird Science!
Fantasy and microchips
Shootin' from the hip
Something different
We'll make it!
Weird Science!
Pictures from a magazine
Diagrams and charts
Mending broken hearts
We'll make it!
My Creation!
Is it real?
It's my Creation!
I do not know
Some hesitation
And a heart of gold
It's flesh and blood!
I do not know. I do not know!
From my heart and from my hand
Why don't people understand
My intentions?
Ooh Weird!
It's alive!
Weird!
Magic and technology
Behind bolted doors
Not what teacher said to do
Living tissue, we'll make it!
It's my Creation!
Is it real?
It's my Creation!
I do not know
Some hesitation
And a heart of gold
It's flesh and blood!
I do not know. I do not know!
Oooh, Weird Science!
Wisdom is outside, calling in the streets
She shouts in the town square, at the city limits,
Right here and now she says
"How long, you idiots? How long do you love stupidity?
The haters loving only their hating
And fools all hating the knowledge?
Step down when I say 'step off' See,
I'm holding nothing back here
I'm telling you right now!
Cause I called you out and you shook your head
I held out my hand and you wouldn't even look at it
But you won't heed my warnings, hear my truth
You wouldn't even listen when I dismissed you
I'll laugh then, when it comes down on you
I'll tell you 'I told you so' when you finally feel that fear
When your fear breaks your will, and your life
And this pain's on you like a tornado
When you're scared and the hurt is straight fucking you
Then you call me, but I'm not answering you by then
You'll even call early to try to get me and you won't find me
Because you hated the truth, and you wouldn't fear your Master
You wouldn't take my warning, you hated all of my answers."
Then, you all gonna get what's coming to you
You'll take everything you gave out
This was easy. you shoulda listened. Now you're dead.
The just desserts of fools is yours to eat, and it will end you.
Still, those who have the time to give a listen, listen now
And the Master can still keep you safe
And the knowledge will keep your thoughts free.
Proverbs: Chapter 1, Verse 20-33. "Hey yo bitch" translation.
a weird little song I relate to, and no, it's not about you.
Rocked, silent, in a soft lullaby
Panic stirred me awake
By a ringing phone in time
Where and when... Would I see her?
Crazy were the words
That scribbled out your mouth
I stuttered placing
Your face to those words
Where and when... Would I kill her?
I'll wish on this, I'll wish with this
I... I will wish
At the bitter end of my day, well, where were you?
But you had your turn, and you made it work
Now I'm the laughingstock of your joke
As crazy as it may seem, I cried for you when you
Told me to date all of the things
That made you end up in my life
And I'll believe anything... I have no luck with girls.
I overheard--Tha
Misleading trust--Into a relationship that makes no sense
Over and out, Connecticut!
But you had your back turned
There as you faded away, at the end of my day
I found out: You weren't worth what I thought of you!
Write this down in your diary you abuse
Can I make plans? Can I just get through to you?
Is this weird? Do I scare her?!
I'll wish on this, I'll wish with this
I, I will wish
That you could share the love you shared with others
With me... Me
But you had your turn, and you made it work
Now I'm the laughingstock of your joke
As crazy as it may seem, I cried for you when you
Told me to date all of the things
That made you end up in my life
And I'll believe anything... I have no luck with girls.
I overheard--Tha
Misleading trust--Into a relationship that makes no sense
Over and out, Connecticut!
But you had your back turned
There as you faded away, at the end of my day
I found out: You weren't worth what I thought of you!
Aha! Aha! What I thought of you?
So this isn't love!
So forever let it go! Forever let it burn
Here on the Backend of Forever, I wish I would never hurt again
What I thought of you?
I wish I would never hurt again
It's bugging me, grating me
And twisting me around
Yeah I'm endlessly caving in
And turning inside out
'cause I want it now, I want it now
Give me your heart and your soul
And I'm not breaking down, I'm breaking out
Last chance to lose control
It's holding me, morphing me
And forcing me to strive to be
Endlessly cold within
And dreaming I'm alive
'cause I want it now, I want it now
Give me your heart and your soul
And I'm not breaking down, I'm breaking out
Last chance to lose control
And I want you now, I want you now
I'll feel my heart implode
And I'm breaking out, Escaping now
Feeling my faith erode Missing: </i>
This is for me and something I'm going through.
you had all of them on your side, didn't you? didn't you?
you believed in all your lies, didn't you? didn't you?
the ruiner's got a lot to prove he's got nothing to lose and now he made you believe
the ruiner's your only friend well he's the living end to the cattle he deceives
the raping of the innocent you know the ruiner ruins everything he sees
now the only pure thing left in my fucking world is wearing your disease
how'd you get so big?
how'd you get so strong?
how'd you get so hard?
how'd you get so long?
you had to give them all a sign, didn't you?
you had to covet what was mine, didn't you?
the ruiner's a collector he's an infector serving his shit to his flies
maybe there will come a day when those that you keep blind will suddenly realize
maybe it's a part of me you took to a place I hoped it would never go
and maybe that fucked me up much more than you'll ever know
how'd you get so big?
how'd you get so strong?
how'd you get so hard?
how'd you get so long?
what you gave to me
my perfect ring of scars
you know I can see what you really are
you didn't hurt me --nothing can stop me now.
This for the echo I heard last night
These days with the world getting colder
She spends more time sleeping over
Than I had planned
Tonight we're gonna order in
Chicken, wine and watching CNN
It dark I know but then again
It's the brightest thing I got
When I'm covered in the rain
I'm covered in rain
Covered in rain
From fireworks to fireplaces
Some are stored in far away places
Now we're people watching other people
People watching us right back now
Standing by the missing signs
At the CVS, by the checkout line
She puts her quiet hands in mine
Cause she's the brightest thing I got
When I'm covered in rain, in rain
When I'm covered in the rain, in rain
You'd said "Can't understand the day you left
You mentioned somethin 'bout it being for the best
And I can't say I disagree, but it's killing me..."
But now I'm standing facing west
Tracing my fingers round your sillouhette
I haven't gotten used to you yet
But you're the brightest thing I got!
When I'm covered in rain
Oh covered in rain, oh covered in rain
Now baby, don't mistake "that shit" fo love!
Cuz I love you, you.... Love you... You
Covered in Rain! In Rain! Let's say! Whatever!
"Oh, a working class face glares back
At me from the glass and lurches
Oh, forgive me, on the streets I ran
Turned sickness into popular song
Streets of wet black hoes
And worlds you can never know
You never have them, but they always have you
'Till the day that you croak
It's no joke!
Oh, a working class face glares back
At me from the glass and lurches
Oh, forgive me on the streets I ran
Turned sickness into unpopular song
And all these streets can do
Is to claim to know the real you
And know if you don't leave, you will kill or be killed
Which isn't very nice
Here everybody's friendly
But nobody's friends
Oh dear God, when will I be where I should be?
And when the palmist said:
"On Thursday you will be dead"
I said: "No, not me! This cannot be!
Dear God, take him, take them, take anyone
The stillborn, The newborn, The infirm
Take anyone!
Take people from Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
Just spare me!"
Nobody knows what human life is
Why we come, why we go
So why then do I know
I will see you?
I will see you in far off places
The heart knows why I grieve
And yes one day I will close my eyes forever
But I will see you
I will see you in far off places
It's so easy for us to sit together
But it's so hard for our hearts to combine
And why?
And why? Why oh why oh why?
Destiny for some is to save lives
But destiny for some is to end lives
But there is no end
And I will see you in far off places
If your god bestows protection upon you
And if the U-S-A doesn't bomb you
I believe I will see you
Somewhere safe
Looking to the camera, messing around
And pulling facesMissing: </i>
Putting up my DBZ story tonight! Please read! Nio promised to, and maybe Goma and Thrice might enjoy it!
K, one more, let's see if Nio-Chan knows this one?
You're such an inspiration for the ways I'll never-ever choose to be
Oh so many ways for me to show you how your Savior has abandoned you
Thank your God! Your Lord, your Christ
He did this! Took all you had and
Left you this way! Still you pray, never stray, never
Taste of the Fruit! Never thought to question "Why?"
It's not like you killed someone!
It's not like you drove an evil Spear into His side
Pray for what I let you! Broken down and paralyzed
He did it all for you! Did it for you!
Oh so many ways for me to show you how dogma has abandoned you
Pray! To the Christ, to the God
Never taste of the fruit! Never stray, never break, never
Choke on a lie! Even though He's the one who
Did this to you! Never thought to question "Why?"
It's not like you killed someone!
It's not like you drove a spiteful Spear into His side
Talk to Jesus Christ as if you know the reasons why
He did all for you! He did it for you!
He did it all for YOU! You! YOU! You! You
What? Throw dirt on me and grow a wild flower
But it's fuck the world. Get a child out her
Yeah, my life a bitch, but you know nothing 'bout her
Been to hell and back, I can show you vouchers
I roll in sweets, I'm smoking sour
Married to the game, but she broke her vows
That's why my bars are full of broken bottles
And my night stands are full of open bibles
Ugh, I think about more than I forget
But I don't go around fire expecting not to sweat
And these niggas know I lay 'em down, make your bed
Bitches, try to kick me while I'm down, I break your leg!
Money out-weighing problems on the triple beam
I'm sticking to the script
You nigga's skipping scenes
Right? Be good or be good at it!
Fucking right! I got my gun, semi-automatic
Yeah? Put they dick in their mouth, so I guess it's fuck what they say
I'm high as a bitch, up up and away,
Man, I come down in a couple of days
Okay, you want me up in the cage? Then I'll come out in BEAST MODE!
I got this world stuck in a safe; cominbation is the G code!
It's me, motherfucka, blood gang and I'm in bleed mode,
All about my door but I don't even check the peep hole
So you can keep knocking, But won't lock me down
No love lost. No love foundMissing: </b>
If ever words were spoken
Painful and untrue
I said I loved you but I lied
In my life
All I wanted
Was the keeping
Of someone like you
As it turns out
Deeper within me
Love was twisted, and pointed at you
--Never ending pain, quickly ending life --
You keep this love! Thing
Love! Child
Love! Toy
You keep this love! Fist
Love! Song
Love! Break
You keep this love
I'd been the tempting one
Stole her from herself
This gift in pain
Her pain was life
And sometimes, I feel so sorry
I regret this, the hurting of you
But you make me so unhappy
I'd take my life and leave love with you
--I'd kill myself for you, I'd kill you for myself --
You keep this love! Thing
Love! Child
Love! Toy
You keep this love! Fist
Love! Song
Love! Break
You keep this love!
No more head trips
You keep this love! Thing
Love! Child
Love! Toy
You keep this love! fist,
Love! Song
Love! Break
You keep this love!
Hope
Missing: </b>
Don't hear! Don't deem!
Drown in before you dive!
Don't care! Commit!
to your self destruction drive!
I kiss the ground with love beyond forever
Flip off the sky
With bleeding fingers till I die!
Enemy, take one good look at me
Eradicate what you'll always be
Your tainted flesh, polluted soul
Through a mirror I behold!
Throw a punch, shards bleed on the floor
Tearing me apart
But I don't care anymore!
Should I regret? Or ask myself
Are You Dead Yet?
Wake up! Don't cry!
Regenerate to deny
The truth,
The fiction you live in blindfold your eyes
Disclosure, self loathing
This time you've gone too far
Or could it be, my nemesis,
That you are me?
Enemy, take one good look at me
Eradicate what you'll always be
Your tainted flesh, polluted soul
Through a mirror I behold!
Throw a punch, shards bleed on the floor
Tearing me apart
But I don't care anymore!
Should I regret? Or ask myself
ARE YOU DEAD YET?Missing: </b>
When you were here before
Couldn't look you in the eye
You're just like an angel
Your skin makes me cry
You float like a feather
In a beautiful world
I wish I was special
You're so fucking special
But I'm a creep
I'm a weirdo
What the hell am I doing here?
I don't belong here...
I don't care if it hurts
I want to have control
I want a perfect body
I want a perfect soul
I want you to notice when I'm not around
You're so fucking special
I wish I was special
But I'm a creep
I'm a weirdo
What the hell I'm doing here?
I don't belong here
She's running out the door
She's running out
She runs, runs, runs,
Runs! Run!
Whatever makes you happy
Whatever you want
You're so fucking special
I wish I was special...
But I'm a creep
I'm a weirdo
What the hell am I doing here?
I don't belong here...
I don't belong here Missing: </b>
I'm going to die soon. I've lost everything I own, and all of my friends and family in a few short hours. I'm physically beaten up by my own best friend, and my moms leaving me to die.
It'll be over soon. At this rate, at least. I'm going to die. I can feel it. I don't know what's going to happen next. I'm in a small tire shop now charging my phone. This may be the last any of you hear from me. I love you all.
Okay sorry for the diary spam. This is a real entry I swear.
I'm having trouble getting over the things I fucked up this year. Particularly how mean I was to [Lilya Athena]. she dumped me for a reason I don't fully grasp, but I was so heartbroken I turned to anger. She's such a sweet and compassionate and brilliant and creative girl. She meant a lot to me. Her constant support and kindness was something I took for granted. Now when I think about how generous and forgiving she was/is, and how she doesn't ever want to speak to me again now, I feel like a lead weight with a creamy, dogshit center.
As for [Akane Ice], I miss the hellout of her, but I completely understand where she was coming from cutting me off. I just wish it was more...uh.. amicable. I'm pretttty sure she hates me too.
I can't stand being hated by people I love. It hurts. I think it makes me a scumbag.
Lacerating pains of degeneration speed through your
trembling mind
Still, in machine-like strife you gain another mile
The temporary elusive goal: To reach the solace, to
feed once more
upon the synthetic reaper of loss. No matter the
outcome. No matter the cost
Cold and stinging needs tearing through the halls
Of your defiled, flesh made temple with its closing
walls
Still you claim the worshippers pose and you bow. You
kneel
Control: once superior, now a docile pet at chaos'
feet
Pulling the leash as it trails the scent to where all
hurt recedes
Your past a blurry patch in mind, your future once; now thin dreams filed
Toward the lights of need you strive, to drink into your vein the shine
Beaten to the unforgiving ground.
Lashed into submission
By the inner starving demon. By its unrelenting hand
Still you claim the worshippers pose and you bow. You kneel to the syringe
Answering only to authorities of sedation. Their calls the only ones heeded
A worn out soldier touched by their contagion. A battered drone at their feet
You're the one betrayed. An outcast set afire by your
inner war
Your burning self so far astray. A combustion fanned
from within your core