Tooth and Talon Characters

2009-05-29 [Artsy]: *plods around* I'm still confused what's going on.

2009-05-29 [Flisky]: It's a WIP. I want input. Okay, need input. It's based off my story realm, built so a friend of mine could RP with me and more of my friends.

2009-05-29 [Artsy]: Ooookaaaayyy... Let's see here:

The heroes of the former wars have all been called forward [to duty? you get called forward in order to help, not to leave the planet], leaving a world of peace [if it's at peace already, they don't need to be 'called forward', not to mention the particular wording of this sentence makes it seem like you are talking about american comic books, like... The Watchmen, or League of Extraordinary Gentlemen, but I believe this is supposed to be more fantasy, right?]. However, one seeks to destroy it [the peace, or the world?]. The nephew of King Riordin has taken it upon himself to destroy what is left of the royal family [oh, so.. neither peace or the world, this is so Rasputin and the Russian royal family], to take what he sees as his rightful place. As a part-dragon and grandson of the legendary Xandra Farold, Rilion [you just introduced him twice now] feels it is his birthright to take over the kingdom of Essin [you've already said that] and do what his great-grandfather, Rijiold, could not. Destroy the realm of humans. [Why did Rijiold want to do that? Who the hell was he? Is he famous? does he have a legend? What's the story?]

2009-05-29 [Flisky]: Hmm...See? That's why it's a WIP. I suck at this.

2009-05-29 [Artsy]: Just takes time to get used to filling out an idea. To you, it seems good, but your knowledge fills it in. To others, like me, it might not make sense.

2009-05-29 [Flisky]: That's where I stumble, I think.

2009-05-29 [Artsy]: Just practice, you'll get it. Umm if you want examples of my work (I don't guarantee they are the best) you can check out Prolific Rapture or Fractured Anima I believe they are two of my roleplays, though one MAY be a page of the other... le sigh. Anyway, I'm gonna have to re-start them... I'll do that today...

2009-05-29 [Flisky]: I'm working on rewriting some of the first few parts. The history is going to need alot of work (I already knew that). Hmmm...examples...Thanks.

2009-05-29 [Artsy]: Welcome to 'um. I hope you get this up and running. It's got promise.

2009-07-30 [Lin Star]: So...don't forget to add me to the page. ;D I know you remembered, just wanted to comment. lol

2009-07-30 [Flisky]: Oh, shoot. I forgot. Sorry. :)

2009-07-30 [Lin Star]: That's okay. ;3 We all forget the little things. ;D