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2010-03-01 [*Phoenix*]: I added the second part because those are the notes you sent me in the email, so now I don't know how they'll play into the story...
2010-03-01 [Eyden13]: Its Fine. Great actually ^-^
2010-03-01 [*Phoenix*]: coolio!
2010-04-02 [*Phoenix*]: I was a little confused on this section:
“Don is coming back from a trip from Oxford. If you wait a few minutes I’m sure you could catch him and say hello.” I swallowed the lump in my throat.
“Thanks, but no thanks. Chrissy is waiting for us, and you know how she is.” I started to make my way to the others, who had stopped moving and were now watching us.
“Chrissy and I don’t really talk any more.” I held on to Nate with a tight grip when I got close to him.
The underlined sentence is worded awkwardly and I'm not sure what you meant it to say there....Could you help me out?
2010-04-02 [Eyden13]: What i was talking about was that when Aaron was pulling away, and trying o move closer to Eva and everyone she held on to Nate's arm for suport. Is this better, When I reached Nate I held on to his arm with a tight grip.
2010-04-04 [*Phoenix*]: yes sire. :)
You'll have to change it with the ones I just emailed you. :)
2010-04-04 [Eyden13]: k
2010-05-21 [*Phoenix*]: I crossed out what we've already done. :)
2010-07-13 [*Phoenix*]: Hey! I think we need to have another "talk time." ;) There's still some stuff I'm a little fuzzy on.
2010-07-14 [Eyden13]: sure when do you want to do it? By any chance if your own now?
2010-07-14 [*Phoenix*]: Well, now we're all good. :]
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